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002 Endings

Title: Darkness Overwhelming
Fandom: Mystic Force
Pairing: N/A
Prompt: 002 Endings
Rating: 15s for dark and disturbingness, not so much here but through the fic
Disclaimer: I don't own these characters, although I guess I own these interpretations of them.
Summary/Warnings: Somewhere, all wishes come true. A Dark Wish AU. This is a dark, dark series, all; death, destruction and terror.
Word Count: 250/52, 669
Author's Notes: Thanks to the ever-reliable scifislasher for beta, encouragement and a lot of help.

Also posted in pr_au100 and in the Pit.

I can't figure out fake cuts, so here's the whole thing. Can anyone explain them to me?





002 Endings

The end of everything they knew came very quickly. A few hours after the earthquake everything went dark. When the light—such as it was—came back, all the color had bled out of their world and there was screaming in the streets.

Toby tried to make them stay in Rock Porium, where it was vaguely safe, but they fought and argued until he let them go. They promised to stick together as long as possible and to come back once they knew what was happening.



Almost half a day later Xander found Chip wandering aimlessly along Main Street. The red head had a streak of dried blood down one arm and, like Xander, he was filthy.

"Chip!" Xander caught his good arm when it looked like he was going to keep walking, trying to stop him and look at his injury at the same time. "Are you alright?"

"My house is gone." He said it as though he couldn't quite believe it, and Xander couldn't blame him.

His own neighborhood had been totally untouched...and completely empty. Several houses were open but no one was around; even next door's cat was missing. He'd had to force himself to search his home, terrified of what he might find, terrified of what he might not.

There'd been no sign of his parents or his baby sister.

“You're bleeding. Are you ok?"

Chip touched his arm, frowning. "Someone knocked me over. Where are the girls?"

"With Toby, I hope. Come on."

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angel_negra
Dec. 6th, 2009 12:54 am (UTC)
Wow
As openings go, that's certainly a gripping one. And god, that image of just an empty street is very chilling. I like how you managed that effect without having to resort to blood and gore.
wild_force71
Dec. 6th, 2009 04:13 pm (UTC)
Re: Wow
Thank you! I'm not much good at the 'gore' end of things, so I just stranded the group in a warzone instead. :D

I'm so happy you're reading! Can I ask how come? Of course you see the entries every week for the SR, don't you...
angel_negra
Dec. 6th, 2009 05:09 pm (UTC)
Re: Wow
Gore can be overdone and rather easily at that. And everyone usually goes to that end for the easy horror, so it's easy to get desensitized as a reader. This is why I prefer horror moments that don't go the easy route. You find much more chilling stuff there.

I do see the entries every week for the SR, and I've been meaning to read this for ages. You've always been a good writer, I just don't get as much time as I'd like for reading, and you'd been posting for so long, I was worried I'd get lost trying to find the start of the story. But then the other day I finally noticed you had a reading order table, and I have the weekend free of assignments, so I sat down and started reading.
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